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学写十四行诗 （2）：写商籁的诗人 The Poet Who Writes Sonnet

Rhyming scheme: 押韵格式  abba cddc effe gg

Some say that all poets like alcohol,
Without which they can't produce any poems,
And gradually this may be some problems.
Some say no, just some of them, but not all.  
I'm a happy bottle, never been  blue,   
I was born to contain the tasty wine,
When in my prime I looked perfectly fine,
Wine was instilled into me  after it's brewed.
But  now I am  emptied by this poet,
who just flicked  his hand and  put me aside,
And to the screen he fixes his drunken eyes,
He is trying to write a nice sonnet.
Now his eyes  are gleamed with sparkling fire,
Can he write one that'll feed his readers' desire?

有人说所有的诗人都爱喝酒，
没有酒就写不出任何诗来，
慢慢地，这个可能成为一些问题。
有人说不，非全部诗人都爱喝酒。
我是一只开心的瓶子，不知道忧愁，
生来就是去装载美酒的，
在我的全盛时期，我美轮美奂---
被注入刚刚酿好的酒。
但是现在我被这位诗人倒空了.
他摆摆手，然后把我放一边去，
然后他用醉眼盯着电脑荧屏，
尝试去写一首漂亮的商籁。
现在他的眼睛闪烁着火一般的光芒，
他能写一首给以读者慰藉的商籁吗？  


作者：Xiaoman
August 8， 2016

I just modified it accordingly based on the advice by a net friend

http://www.writingforums.com/threads/167454-The-Poet-Who-Writes-Sonnets




Some say that all poets like alcohol,
Without which they can't produce any poem,
And gradually this may be a problem.
Some say no, just some of them, but not all.
I'm a happy bottle, never been blue,
I was born to contain tasty wine,
When in my prime I looked perfectly fine,
as time went by, the wine value grew.
But now I am emptied by this poet,
He just flicked his hand and put me aside,
And to the screen he fixes his drunken eyes,
He is trying to write a nice sonnet.
Now his eyes gleam with sparkling fire,
Can he write one that feeds his readers' desire?